​Unit 19 learning aim C

proposal script draft

script feedback

Using all the feedback I've received about my script. I will use it to aid my redraft looking at each individual section attempting to change any errors or crosses on the feedback to a tick by doing the needed edits.

Final script draft ive made the nessarcy changes by taking on the feedback from the sheets. my script is finsihed and formatted better than it was before also adding more diloigue which was something that i lacked and was told in the feedback sheet